Einstein developed a number of the most important theories in modern physics, including an explanation of the photoelectric effect, an explanation of Brownian motion, special and general relativity, and Bose-Einstein quantum statistics. However, Einstein also had life-long problems with infidelity. The fact that he cheated on his wife is in no way relevant to his accomplishments in the field of physics, and indeed most references to Einstein properly ignore it.
To focus attention on the faults of his personal life is to obscure the impact he made on history. Great individuals have personal faults, as all human beings do. We are better able to appreciate the gravity of great accomplishments when we are not burying our heads in the sand, in search of personal failings. The essay above earned a 6 because it takes all five steps necessary for a perfect score on the AWA.
The thesis is extremely clear and concise. There is no ambiguity about how the author feels about the issue; she simply states her opinions with confidence and clarity. This section tests how well we can present a position on an issue effectively and persuasively and this author passes with flying colors. The piece is also very well organized via the suggested intro-body-body-body-conclusion template. While she does deviate slightly from the suggested model by giving two examples rather than three, the first body paragraph strengthens the essay by lending heft and specificity to her position.
Her two examples are very strong. President Lincoln is an ideal case study of a leader whose greatness should be not be obscured by his domestic doldrums however interesting they may be to learn about. The same can be said with Einstein; his infidelities went to the grave with the women he may have wounded emotionally, while his work will live forever.
Additionally, the conclusion is substantial and does an excellent job of summing up the essay without sounding too much like the introduction. It is easy to recycle many clauses from the intro in the conclusion, but this author does a great job of restating the thesis without sounding overly redundant.
Lastly, this essay is extremely well-written. The grammar and syntax are practically flawless; the author sounds knowledgeable but not pedantic. Keep these steps in mind as you write your GMAT essay and you should have little trouble earning a score that is reflective of your overall b-school portfolio.
Best of luck with your GMAT prep! The argument would have been much clearer if it explicitly gave examples of how the self regulatory system led to bad ratings and customer dissatisfaction. Second, the argument claims that any violation fees for bad electronic game ratings are nominal.
It thus suggests that this is yet another reason for the rating system not working. This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between the monetary amount of the fines and the quality of the electronic game rating system. In fact, the argument does not even draw a parallel with the mentioned movie rating system and its violation fines.
If any such correlation had been shown for the movie rating system, which supposedly works well, then the author would have sounded a bit more convincing. In addition, if the argument provided evidence that low violation fines lead to electronic game manufacturers to ignore any regulations with respect to the game rating system, the argument could have been strengthened even further.
Finally, the argument concludes that an independent body should oversee the game industry and companies that violate the rating system, should be punished. From this statement again, it is not at all clear how an independent regulatory body can do a better job than a self regulated one.
Without supporting evidence and examples from other businesses where independent regulatory bodies have done a great job, one is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence. As a result, this conclusion has no legs to stand on. In summary, the argument is flawed and therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts. In order to assess the merits of a certain situation, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors.
Originally posted by chineseburned on 22 May , Last edited by bb on 14 Nov , Chicago Booth - Class of Great stuff chineseburned, much obliged!!!!!! If you have any additional material that might be useful kindly post it They say to write 6 paragraphs.
Chineseburned, if you have more pls post this. We'll appreciate this exciting!!! Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin. Discuss how well-reasoned you find this argument.
In your discussion, be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion.
You can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument, what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion. The author fails to make logical connections between the evidence provided and the conclusion that all illegal aliens must be returned to their country of origin.
The first problem with the argument is that it suffers from multiple unsubstantiated claims. The first evidence that is given to support the extreme conclusion is that the autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders. This statement is also extreme because it infers that every countries autonomy could be ranked by the strength of its borders.
There are many European countries that have very little strength exerted at the borders, but still maintain autonomy. The author should clarify this statement by grouping countries together or using a more vague statement that would include most countries but not all. The next statement in the argument is conditional phrase stating that the more illegal immigrants that enter a country the worse off the economy and national identity will be.
While this statement might be true for some countries it is certainly not true for all countries. The very foundation of early US society was based on immigrant labor and culture that brought from over the sea. There are still many countries whose economy is heavily dependent on immigrant labor. Even though many economist feel this statement is true in the US today, most would disagree that this statement is true of all countries. The final portion of the author's argument is the conclusion.
The conclusion states that the because of disadvantages mentioned earlier all illegal immigrants must be returned to their country of origin. Although this statement might appear to be a logical conclusion of this extreme argument it fails to take extra information into account.
The author doesn't give any indication on how extreme these problems will be or how costly it will be to return the amount of illegal aliens to their home country. What if the cost to the economy was half the amount that it would cost to send all of the immigrants back to their country of origin? The author could use some monetary figures to prove that some savings would be incurred if all illegal immigrants were deported. In conclusion, the argument suffers from logical flaws and makes an extreme conclusion based on unproven assumptions.
The addition of hard examples and connections between the statements would prove to strengthen the argument. Wow Chineseburned, this makes the AWA much easier to attack. I hope that it will help me to improve my 4. You must be rewarded. However, just wanted to note that words is quite a bit! I think words is still pretty good enough to get a 6. The only addendum I would add here is that you do not necessarily need to make 3 points.
I made 2 points on an essay and still got a 6. If you don't make 3 points, though, make sure you write a lot about the 2 points. Word count is important, i think.
The structure part of your guide was very helpful. I didn't read past section 3, and it was good enough to take me from a 4. My conclusion paragraphs were very short too, and my intros weren't that long either. My three body paragraphs were very long though. Don't bother with fluff and save that for the body, as that seems to be what they are looking for.
Same with the conclusion. A couple sentences seems to suffice i. Display posts from previous: All posts 1 day 7 days 2 weeks 1 month 3 months 6 months 1 year Sort by Author Post time Subject Ascending Descending.
Ways to earn points. Redeem points For rewards. Final tips During the tutorial type in a few sentences in the mock essay window to get used to the keyboard. Again during the tutorial, jot down on your notebook the basic structure of your essays or the opening sentences in case you get too nervous and forget them when the clock starts ticking.
Write as much as you can. Try to write at least words per essay. Always have the e-rater in mind as your potential reviewer. Remember that the human rater will make every effort to grade just like the e-rater. Be careful of spelling mistakes. Double check words that you normally know you misspell e. Try to finish minutes before time is up so you can slowly re-read your essay for the purposes of spell checking.
No matter how great you thought your essays went, try to stay humble and focused - remember this was just a warm-up and the real stuff hasn't started yet! Added the template as image. I include this in the conclusions. Ann Arbor, Michigan Schools: Ross Class of The School that shall not be named.
GMAT Essay (a.k.a GMAT AWA) Tips: How to Start Strong! The GMAT Essay, also called the GMAT Analytical Writing Assessment, or AWA, appears at the very beginning of the GMAT. The essay requires you to read a short argument and make a written analysis of the argument. This opening GMAT task has a 30 minute time limit.
Write an essay like a prose or story. The E-rater simply doesn’t like this. Rather, your essay should be logically clear, and succinct in content, more like a summary of strategy report from McKinsey.
GMAT Essay Section Guide The Analytical Writing Assessment (AWA) is how business schools evaluate your writing skills with one 30 minue section essay. Your essay will be evaluated by an "E-rater" (a computer "bot" grading program that scans essays). GMAT Analytical Writing Assessment (AWA) About GMAT AWA. The more you practice writing essays, the more comfortable you will become in handling the variety of topics on which essays in GMAT AWA are based. At ExamFocus, we provide you with a myriad of essay prompts, to help you write these essays with ease.
4) When you feel you’ve created a few solid outlines, write a couple essays. Make sure to spend no more than 25 minutes on each essay. If you’re an Economist GMAT Tutor student, upload each completed essay through the Economist GMAT Tutor dashboard. GMAT essays aren't as important as quant and verbal, but you still need to do a good enough job. In this article, one of our expert instructors explains how to create a template for an adequate, effective essay.